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JamesOscar
Lurker
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JamesOscar
Lurker
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@JamesOscar Please stop posting after yourself, it violates the rules of the game and throws the count off.
@JamesOscar Please stop posting after yourself, it violates the rules of the game and throws the count off.
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It goes, it goes. I'm happy that my weekend is coming up shortly. How goes the caboose?
It goes, it goes. I'm happy that my weekend is coming up shortly. How goes the caboose?
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I'm hangin' in there like a hair in a biscuit! Lol. I can't complain too much, this week has been a pretty easy one.
You'll get there one of these days. Plus now you have the opportunity to thank all the people that reply to your story with "OmerGod s00 hawt
" lol
I'm hangin' in there like a hair in a biscuit! Lol. I can't complain too much, this week has been a pretty easy one.
You'll get there one of these days. Plus now you have the opportunity to thank all the people that reply to your story with "OmerGod s00 hawt
" lol
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Just gotta reply...
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
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Hello and welcome to the forum.
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Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
To all the new members of the forum in the introductions section. Bam! 16 counted posts right there!
Just gotta reply...
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
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Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
Hello and welcome to the forum.
To all the new members of the forum in the introductions section. Bam! 16 counted posts right there!
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caboose
Citizen of Zooville
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I agree but it’s a smaller club and I’m into that kinda shit. You could smash to settler with like 26 posts. Thats an easy lift.
YanchaOkami
Esteemed Citizen of ZV
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Wow, a lot of activity here! Welcome to the newly arrived floofs! 
@caboose : I've read your story before some other work which had to be done.
Your story, which is written finely (in terms of the development of it) and with an interesting character building, is written quite well (in terms of writing style), the typos or grammar errors are (as far as I can analyze this as a non-native English speaker) ways below the common amounts in the story category, it offers an adequate spacing between the sentences and clear differing as to recognize the specific communication ways that are used.
Only in regards of the free lines near the end (between the "picture send" notices as example) I would say that one is enough, it creates quite a big empty room which distracts from a smooth reading over multiple lines.
@Mare Lover 1975 : I can fully understand you. And if it were possible, I would smack the shit out over the internet lines of all those posting or praising such crap. Especially those participating in it - hours of smacking until they forget that they even are alive.
I still feel unwell from analyzing it. Reading the initial thread I didn't assume that it would be this bad and continuing to get worse.
Wow, a lot of activity here! Welcome to the newly arrived floofs!
@caboose : I've read your story before some other work which had to be done.
Your story, which is written finely (in terms of the development of it) and with an interesting character building, is written quite well (in terms of writing style), the typos or grammar errors are (as far as I can analyze this as a non-native English speaker) ways below the common amounts in the story category, it offers an adequate spacing between the sentences and clear differing as to recognize the specific communication ways that are used.
Only in regards of the free lines near the end (between the "picture send" notices as example) I would say that one is enough, it creates quite a big empty room which distracts from a smooth reading over multiple lines.
@Mare Lover 1975 : I can fully understand you. And if it were possible, I would smack the shit out over the internet lines of all those posting or praising such crap. Especially those participating in it - hours of smacking until they forget that they even are alive.
I still feel unwell from analyzing it. Reading the initial thread I didn't assume that it would be this bad and continuing to get worse.
YanchaOkami
Esteemed Citizen of ZV
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Yimby-Floof did it - another half of a thousand counted successfully!
Yimby-Floof did it - another half of a thousand counted successfully!
caboose
Citizen of Zooville
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@caboose : I've read your story before some other work which had to be done.
Your story, which is written finely (in terms of the development of it) and with an interesting character building, is written quite well (in terms of writing style), the typos or grammar errors are (as far as I can analyze this as a non-native English speaker) ways below the common amounts in the story category, it offers an adequate spacing between the sentences and clear differing as to recognize the specific communication ways that are used.
Only in regards of the free lines near the end (between the "picture send" notices as example) I would say that one is enough, it creates quite a big empty room which distracts from a smooth reading over multiple lines.
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Thank you so much for the review. I hate how the formatting ended up I did my best to fix it but the spacing is still not how I would like. The Picture send replies were kinda designed to mimic how pictures would look like on a chat phone window. I was trying to dynamically space things in a way that tactile pulls you into the scene.
Thanks again for the review I really appreciate seeing how people feel about it.
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There are times when I really wish punching someone in the face was possible though the internet, watching those videos was definitely such a time.
There are times when I really wish punching someone in the face was possible though the internet, watching those videos was definitely such a time.
YanchaOkami
Esteemed Citizen of ZV
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If you would want a grammar / spelling check, I saw a few small mistakes, but I don't think it's fair or necessary to throw them around, as they don't play a role in how well this story is readable.
And it is well readable, as such if you don't "need" to hear those from me, I'll just keep on ignoring them.
Absolutely. How people don't see the distressed looks and tries to leave such a situation, that's shocking. Instead they like it. What the fuck.
Nah, I'm not participating that much in there, don't worry.
Not a problem! The topic of "a young adult female human" doesn't interest me much, but regarding the story and what / how it happens is - even more compared to what mostly gets written on those story sub fora - realistic. As well as described in a neutral way - without an explicit focus on "erotic" ingredients. At least in this first chapter.
If you would want a grammar / spelling check, I saw a few small mistakes, but I don't think it's fair or necessary to throw them around, as they don't play a role in how well this story is readable.
And it is well readable, as such if you don't "need" to hear those from me, I'll just keep on ignoring them.